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 But despite reality leaving no room for doubt, my existence as a human never felt right to me.
 
 I was 6 years old when I first became aware that something was wrong.
-I'm sure many of you have seen "The Sword in the Stone" by Disney, wherein the protagonist Arthur is transformed into various animals to learn different life lessons.
-I was watching this movie one evening and was fascinated by the idea of possessing a nonhuman body, especially that of a bird.
-What would it be like to experience the world as one?
-To be covered in feathers that are bristling in the wind as I'm flying through the sky?
+It was evening and I was watching "The Sword in the Stone" by Disney, an animated film about a boy called Arthur who is transformed into various animals to learn different life lessons.
+I was immediately fascinated by the idea of possessing a nonhuman body, and especially that of a bird.
+What would it feel like to experience having such a completely different body; to have a beak and wings and to be covered in feathers that are bristling in the wind as I'm flying through the sky?
 I hadn't noticed the persistent nagging at the back of my mind before, but as I imagined myself in this situation it fell silent for the first time in my life.
 I didn't question what was happening -- I was only 6 years old after all.
 I just knew that imagining I was a bird felt right and so it turned into a habit that would last for a very long time.
 
-As I got older,